The castle in the forest

                                                                                      Once upon a time there was a towering castle at the top of a hill. The green,flaky trees are as tall as the castle. The sky is as blue as a dolphin with clouds like steam. The sky was like a huge, blue diamond. The trees were as green as shiny emeralds.

10 Comments

  1. bvkayden says:

    I love your adjectives, but try use aa fronted adverbials.

  2. bvkayden says:

    I love your adjectives, but try use a fronted adverbials.

  3. Miss Copeland says:

    Well done Ava. You have used similes in your writing.
    Could you add any subordinating conjunctions?

  4. bvjustin says:

    well done can you add advrbs

  5. bvlinah says:

    good one but pleas add a noun who which where

    and conjunction pleas.

  6. bvlinah says:

    good one but pleas add a noun who which where

  7. bvbahar says:

    well done ava. i’ve seen youve used 2 A sentances make sure next time to trie to use a allitaration

  8. bvlinah says:

    good one but pleas add a noun who which where

    and check back and add some word in one of your sentences

  9. bvlaila says:

    WOW!! I really loved reading your short story i also have done one about a castle in a forest.

  10. bvaliza1 says:

    well done i love the adgectives you have used could you use a noun who which where

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