The tragic fire that hit England

In a city called Manchester, there was a wonderful bakery that soled the best cakes. The owner was a very clumsy man, and didn’t get full stars whenever it came to the customers decision. one day, the man was so angry that he couldn’t do any thing properly. suddenly, he created a fire. It spread into a small village and destroyed all the houses and left them in pieces . what had he done he thought. A woman was filling up her car when it happened and, in shock, she spilled all over the ground . The fire was heading her way.

2 Comments

  1. Manal says:

    You have told the reader where the story is set and who set the fire.You have used an adverb.
    Next time, check your work.

  2. Doa says:

    Hi Katie
    Star-I like that you have used great suspense in your story.
    Star 2-I also like the way you have created a powerful image by using adverbs to show how something happened.
    Wish- You could use more adjectives when describing a character or the fire, for example you could have said;
    Suddenly, he created a great,roaring fire.

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