What happened to the house?

One dark and spooky night a horrific fire hit  small houses.How did the fire start?The fire,who got biger second,sadly burnt al the houses.As the fire got bigger and bigger the houses burnt and got destroyed .Do you now who set this boiling,hot fire?A while later,the houses broke in to pieces. Some people like the way dragons blow fire ,but don’t want to go next to it;others hate the way dragons set it and don’t even like going next to the heated fire.What do think the people inside the house are thinkinking about this naughty dragon.The dangerous dragon burnt all the houses.

4 Comments

  1. wareesha1 says:

    A good story Lujane you have got a spelling mistake for bigger on the second line of your sentence. You had written biger instead of bigger. 🙂

  2. nawaz1 says:

    In your noun w/w/w the fire is not a person it’s s thing , so it should be which instead of who.. The noun w/w/w doesn’t make sense. It should be the fire which got bigger every second sadly burnt all the houses. In your some and others you have got lots of ideas in 1 sentence. Add full stops to separate it.

  3. Manal says:

    You have used rhetorical questions.You have use a some and other sentence.
    You didn’t put a comma after night on the first line.

  4. lujane says:

    One dark and spooky nigh, a horrific fire hit small houses.How did the fire start?The fire,which got bigger second,sadly burnt al the houses.As the fire got bigger and bigger the houses burnt and got destroyed .Do you now who set this boiling,hot fire?A while later,the houses broke in to pieces. Some people like the way dragons blow fire ,but don’t want to go next to it;others hate the way dragons set it and don’t even like going next to the heated fire.What do think the people inside the house are thinkinking about this naughty dragon.The dangerous dragon burnt all the houses.

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